This is story I started writing in school, so I was wondering what you thought of it. comments are not necessary but appreciated:
I walked though the big, green door to see an open, rolling green field. I breathed in the sweet air as I walked forward. I came up to a giant forest full of rainbow colored, ferret like animals. They said, "follow us!" so I did. They showed me a miniscule house. Before they left, they gave me a little bag. I went into the house to find a cute little puppy sitting on a mountainous pile of gold, rare weapons, and precious jewels. The puppy woke up and said, "Take what you need." I opened the bag the rainbow ferrets gave me and filled it with the treasure. I also took a sword of diamond and a shield with rubies on it. I thanked the puppy and left.
I started walking for a while and found a giant cave. Being the young kid I am, I yelled, "WOOOOOOOOOO" into the cave. Then I heard chains rustling and someone calling, "Help! Somebody, anybody!" I went into the cave and found a really big dragon. I cut the chains with my sword of freakin' diamonds and asked the dragon why he was stuck here. He said, "The goblins trapped me here!" He said a prophecy where I would fight the goblin king needed to happen or all of foliagerdom would be under the goblins jurisdiction. He flew me to the goblin castle. I found the goblin king. He turned and said, "hey, go away." He ran at me, but I knocked him out. Everyone cheered, "long live Lily!" I thought, "Long live me indeed!"